Love the spin on the Valentine's holiday. It's very "happy valentine's day. Instead of a card and a bouquet of roses, I thought we could go kick some ass - with hi-tech equipment."
Roy was just inside the plane, looking slightly torn between happy to see Dick, and pissed that he did not know what was going on. Ollie was nearby, fidgeting with the dark grey gi he had donned for this. Dick went and pressed close against him, distracted from his hunt for a few long moments. "Hey, you."
My only thing is *points at paragraph* I was reading it and my instant impression was that Dick cuddled Ollie. Maybe flipping the sentences?
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Roy was just inside the plane, looking slightly torn between happy to see Dick, and pissed that he did not know what was going on. Ollie was nearby, fidgeting with the dark grey gi he had donned for this. Dick went and pressed close against him, distracted from his hunt for a few long moments. "Hey, you."
My only thing is *points at paragraph* I was reading it and my instant impression was that Dick cuddled Ollie. Maybe flipping the sentences?